Please critique my crappy song
- Thread starter Felonius
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Jungle Fish
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your brain is being weighed for your post. we are heroin dealers irl.
I like the tone you use at 1:30 a lot better and think it should just be that way all the way through.
The instrumentation sounds a bit cheesy (8-bit nintendo-ish) but it doesn't sound like a badly composed song.
Kind of A Perfect Circle-esque.
Also, that weird jump up at 1:16 is... weird.
The instrumentation sounds a bit cheesy (8-bit nintendo-ish) but it doesn't sound like a badly composed song.
Kind of A Perfect Circle-esque.
Also, that weird jump up at 1:16 is... weird.
Thanks for checking it out. At 1:30 is live guitar, whereas the rest of the lead parts are done with a poorly configured synth. I'm new to synths in general, and there's a lot I can do to improve the sound of the sampled instruments.
I'm going to replace all of the guitars with real ones (the acoustic guitar, electric rhythm guitar, and solo guitar)... I'll probably still have some keys and piano in there but more in a background role.
if someone did that to me, they'd regret it
i'd poison all their food so there would be no chance of missing
ill only comment on the song from a production standpoint.
my first critique is cut low bass frequencies from instruments/drums/anything that don't use those frequencies -- cut the bass freq's even if you can't hear them.. because the speaker will still try to play them. cut them until it affects the quality of the sound, then edge it back down some.
my second is, get a good drum sample pack and plugin like EzDrummer, or a great one like SuperiorDrummer 2. They come pre-eq'd/comped and sound great, and have good stereo imaging. They can be dropped right into a mix and not really need any mixing.
or just pm me sometime if u want feedback, etc
reference; i do this shit as a side-income
my first critique is cut low bass frequencies from instruments/drums/anything that don't use those frequencies -- cut the bass freq's even if you can't hear them.. because the speaker will still try to play them. cut them until it affects the quality of the sound, then edge it back down some.
my second is, get a good drum sample pack and plugin like EzDrummer, or a great one like SuperiorDrummer 2. They come pre-eq'd/comped and sound great, and have good stereo imaging. They can be dropped right into a mix and not really need any mixing.
or just pm me sometime if u want feedback, etc
reference; i do this shit as a side-income
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Thanks again for the feedback... It's less Nintendo-sounding now (I got rid of the synth), but once I put in the live guitars that should be much less of a problem.
Prop, I will have to work on EQing the individual parts. I applied an EQ to the final mix in the latest version, but that's kind of the lazy way of doing it. I'll definitely PM you sometime -- the info is much appreciated.
Prop, I will have to work on EQing the individual parts. I applied an EQ to the final mix in the latest version, but that's kind of the lazy way of doing it. I'll definitely PM you sometime -- the info is much appreciated.
Very nice man. The drums sound awesome. I remember hearing some of your earlier covers here on TW, several years ago. I prefer your vocals to Dave Grohl's.
I should probably focus on writing more dynamic drum parts for my tune, with variations throughout and use of velocity and moving the notes off the beat to humanize it a bit. Do you tweak the drum parts by hand a lot in a MIDI editor? Trying to learn all of this at once is a bit overwhelming, but I prefer just to jump right in rather than be too OCD about it.
A tutorial for my DAW will help a lot, too, particularly learning the MIDI editor. I'm accustomed to scoring things in Sibelius rather than tweaking them in a DAW, and it's two completely different worlds. The Sibelius method works well enough for orchestral stuff, but for this style it's probably best to do everything in the DAW other than some basic mockups.
Do you write your drum parts out in Guitar Pro or anything like that first?
the piano is too heavy IMO..replace with synth